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Post by nighmare on Sept 5, 2009 18:21:41 GMT -5
hey guys and gals im wrighting a new song tell me what u b thinkin
hey do you see me hear do u wach me walkin by but i shure as hell see your stunnin blue eyes
dont leave me standin on a line dont tell me another lie do u see me hear or am i just another nobody to u no body to u
brush the hair out of ur face walk with a charming pace u barely no my name but i know yours i say it and say it agin it keeps replayin in my head
dont leave me standin on a line dont tell me another lie do u see me hear or am i just another nobody to u no body to u
dont push me down! if i screm and knowones around would u hear me or am i a nobody to u
tell me what u think its about well i bet u can guess lol my crush
rock on peeplz of da world
i realy could use some constructive critisism or input so pleese reply
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Post by whirrs on Sept 5, 2009 18:30:39 GMT -5
hey i like it! (: only criticism: maybe you could use a spell check.
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Post by nighmare on Sept 5, 2009 18:43:10 GMT -5
thanks dude
anyone elts out there got some criticisem
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Post by AnimalAvenger on Sept 6, 2009 18:30:41 GMT -5
I like it, though in writing anything, you should use correct grammar. People may not want to read something with poor grammar. Great job
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Post by nighmare on Sept 7, 2009 16:41:33 GMT -5
thanks guys sorry bout the spellin i was typeing fast
u guys are very helpful
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Post by AnimalAvenger on Sept 7, 2009 22:14:48 GMT -5
No problem.
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